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March 23, 2013
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Carnival by atryl Carnival by atryl
Guild Wars 2 commission
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Hello Atryl,
This is a really good peice of art. The reason you asked for cretiques was to know how you could inprove so I will only say how you could improve this. What I dont mention will be what I like. Any way the colour choice for the 2 characters is graet but they are not strong enough for the bright background. I would suggest making the background a bit dimmer or adding more power to the colors i.e making the red deeper or the green darker ect. Also I think there is a bit too much background shading *just my opinion* as I have not played guild wars I would like to see more of where these characters live. But appart from that I love it.
Keep um the good work.
-Spudfud XD
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Hello, watcher here . I'll see if I can help improve your piece.

First and foremost, the colours are surprisingly muddy. Considering your bright ponies and liberal use of colours in them. It's weird to see a piece from you with such dull and boring browns and yellows. It makes the painting feel sombre despite it being a carnival. The highlights around the figures is slight overdone. could be toned down abit and maybe not pure white/teal for the fabric?

The light source behind could be more to the left? or right? whichever, just something not so dead center and also turned down. Feels like i'm having a seizure with all these blaring bright lights.

Which really doesn't work with the stark brown/black background. It's an interesting contrast just too much for my eyes.

The poses are stiff and unnatural. She's pointing at something, yet her body is still facing us? It's too symmetrical. and putting them right in the dead center like that, is not doing any favors for the composition, and how they are standing too, people don't stand like that unless they gotta whiz.

I'm not a fan of bikini armor either. though thats probably not your fault.

Alright! hope I helped! keep posting art.
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MrNintMan Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Pretty cool!
xelianthought Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
Excellent pic!
salinea Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013
I love your guild wars art. Hnnnnnnnng so perty @___@
Dertaii Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
A3Kitsune Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
BlueWolf-2020 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
Nice. I watch because of ponies, but seeing stuff like this pop up too is cool. I love the outfits.
JazzyTheSmooth Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Nice, this turned out really well!

Just sucks that I couldn't stay for the whole stream...if only I hadn't had class...
Carmine96 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Another awesome piece of art by Atryl.
Masdragonflare Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
niiiiiiiceeeee O_O
TheNoodleGod2012 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
do moar humans!
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